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"Kneel" Astrum spat.

"I refuse to die on my knees." Luka replied with a trembling but bitter voice.

"Very well." Astrum replied and roughly grabbed Luka's crown and pulled his head down as he brought the blade up to begin cutting his crown off.

Luka started grunting and clenched his teeth, resisting the urge to scream again but the pain became unbearable and he couldn't hold back anymore when the tears rolled down his bloody cheeks.

Kyra began to cry for the man who treated her like garbage but loved her like no other woman in his life and only showed her the way he knew how.  She cried for the man she fought beside for two decades; who she saved by using herself as a shield against a large blast, scarring half her body and tail.  Who helped her achieve everything she had in one way or another.  She knew a side of Luka that only one other person knew and Dante's reactions to Luka's screams confirmed that he was that other person.

"Dante.." she sobbed, clenching on to his shirt.

"There's nothing we can do for him now." Dante said quietly, holding back his own tears.  "He brought this on himself."

Astrum finished quickly, having mixed feelings about torturing another being like that.  He may have gotten his revenge for the sake of his mother, sister, and Theo but he couldn't help but feel sick to his stomach now that he was actually about to kill someone he had known for his entire adult life.  With a pained expression on his face, he dropped the severed flesh on the ground next to Luka's tail and straightened Luka by holding his arms, steadying him on his feet.  Luka was now unrecognizable with his face completely covered in his own blood as it poured from his gaping wounds on his bald head.  The trail of blood from his chin poured onto his chest, soaking his shirt.  His lower body tingled and started to go numb as he felt dizzy.  He was losing consciousness from the blood loss but he still stood with pride.  

"You have been stripped of everything that makes you a Burillian.  You are no longer one of us."  Astrum snapped.  "I will do everything in my power to make sure your very existence is erased from the system.  Your legacy will never be known after this day."

"I have already passed on my legacy." Luka laughed, swaying a little on his feet.  "This is only the beginning.  You still lose." he added with a smirk, feeling light headed and tired.

Astrum glanced at the Elder who only nodded back at him.  He took a few steps back to stand by his brother and both Astrum and Switch pulled out their hand guns and pointed them at Luka's head.

Luka looked over in Dante and Kyra's direction.  She could see the look in his eyes and she couldn't help but cry more.  Something she always refused to do in front of other people but the brief look of regret on his face when he glanced only at her, broke her completely.

The sound of gun fire made her jump and she buried her face into Dante's chest as she let out a rage filled cry.  Dante finally let go of his own emotions when he saw Luka's lifeless body drop to the ground.
I'm not going to lie.  I cried hard while writing this.  Luka may have been the biggest asshole and bastard ever but I still cried. T__T

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Nix-Tempesedo Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Asdfghjkl... Feels.....
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BadCowboy69 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I cried as well during a scene in my novel, however, it's not as brutal.  Still, it's been said, when an author can feel emotions while writing a part of a story that effects them by them crying or whatnot, it comes off to the readers.  Powerful part.  Glad the folks on my planet are simple and wouldn't even imagine what all has transpired here.  I think I'll go reside there for a while today after reading this bit eek!
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sugarush14 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thats some execution method they have. Luka deserved it but I feel really sorry for Kyra and Dante having to watch it D:
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comiKazzie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah it's pretty brutal, which is why Astrum made that comment about what happens when they kill their own people.  Murder is a very very rare thing in their society because of the punishment for it.

I knooow. T__T  You can blame =Kipachie for that. XD  The love triangle between Luka, Dante, and Kyra is all part of her fanfiction-turned-canon. xD
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sugarush14 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah I imagine it would be quite effective. Do they have punishments for lesser crimes?

Nice XD
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comiKazzie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very. XD  Though most Burillians don't have the desire to kill another.  Reds have the more aggressive personality out of all the races.  Not saying they're all murderous bastards but they tend to physically lash out more.  Yeah they have punishments for lesser crimes but they are certainly not that brutal. :lol:  Public executions are rare.
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sugarush14 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay, cool =D.
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